As you said to respond to this article with personal experience, I tried to write about this article sharing my personal experience.
It is no wonder when w get any unexpected result in any aspect of life we think ourselves as totally useless in this world. And I think I realized that when I was in my 11th grade. That time I was so excited and more interested in other things about to have fun with friends than giving concentrate to my studies. As well I did very bad in my first exam. I was like to speechless and so frustrated. And also get scared to do better in my next exams. as an introvert person I did not share with anyone else that I am in big trouble with my study, also my mental situation as well. Even I tried to get back to be regular in my study but still it was not seemed manageable to me. And I could not stay away from my closest friend's eys. She asked me and started to dig my brain and read my mind. She tried to understand what was going on inside me. finally I had to shared with her. I told her I am just lost and so scared. and found no way to get rid of this depression. The feeling of that time was like my pains and depression are coming down like a fountain as I felt that at least there is someone who can realize me. Then she helped me out of that bad time by spending more time with me, encouraged me. And tried to make me realized myself. Now only thing I can feel is a good friendship is like an open diary whatever I want I can write forever. It always keeps giving me spaces to write more about my mind and thoughts which are so personal, only a friend can realize that.And that diary never says not to wrote. On other hand I also realized that there are always some friends for hanging out but some friends are just for you.
It is no wonder when we get any unexpected result in any aspect of life we think ourselves as totally useless in this world. And I think I realized that when I was in my 11th grade. That time I was so excited and more interested in other things (about to have fun with friends than giving concentrate—concentration is the noun, concentrate is a verb. I can’t give concentrate. I can give concentration-- to my studies). As well I did very bad in my first exam. I was like to (this is unnecessary, just remove and you’ll say what you want to. You are not like speechless. You are speechless. You can be like something, but you can’t be like an adjective) speechless and so frustrated. And also get scared to do better in my next exams. as an introvert person I did not share with anyone else that I am in big trouble with my study, and also my mental situation as well. Even I tried to get back to be regular in my study but still it was not seemed (you can’t put was and seemed together. Seemed is not an adjective here. It is a verb.) manageable to me. And I could not stay away from my closest friend's eys. She asked me and started to dig my brain and read my mind. She tried to understand what was going on inside me. finally I had to shared (shared is a verb, but you have it after “to.” You can only create an infinitive. So it should be to share) with her. I told her I am just lost and so scared. and found no way to get rid of this depression. The feeling of that time was like my pains and depression are coming down like a fountain as I felt that at least there is someone who can realize me (what do you mean realize?). Then she helped me out of that bad time by spending more time with me, encouraged me. And tried to make me realized myself (again “realize” doesn’t make sense. It is not be the right word). Now only thing I can feel is a good friendship is like an open diary whatever I want I can write forever. It always keeps giving me spaces to write more about my mind and thoughts which are so personal, only a friend can realize that.And that diary never says not to wrote (wrote is a verb, but if you are using it before “to,” it needs to be “write” because that’s the infinitive form). On other hand I also realized that there are always some friends for hanging out but some friends are just for you. (This is good but you need to connect it back to the reading. Use the language of the reading to make your point.)
I agree with the statement that friends make your life better. It is a powerful weapon to help your health. Friends can help you to change your emotions. When you get in trouble , you can get help from your friends and also you can share the happiness with your friends. For example , When I get some problems from my homework, at first I will ask my friends instead of thinking by myself.
I agree with the statement that friends make your life better. It is a powerful weapon to help your health. (how?) Friends can help you to change your emotions.(that’s a new idea. How does it relate to health?) When you get in trouble , you can get help from your friends and also you can share the happiness with your friends. (trouble that will have a negative impact on your emotions?) For example , When I get some problems from my homework, at first I will ask my friends instead of thinking by myself. (and what happens?) (there are a lot of unanswered questions. This is a good beginning but this reads incomplete)
We all have a desire to have a best friend.But a friend is that who will stand by you even during the toughest time. As in the passage, friends make life better.Having friends is really important for us because thay help us to reduce our stress, boredom and depression. friends can be great study partners because when i came to college i do not understand how to do college assignments and home work. So my class fellows helped me to do my home works and now i really enjoy to do group study because we all friends help to each other.I strongly agree with the author that friends makes our life and health better and esay. As in the ariticle, friends reduce our stress and anxiety. Same like this oneced i wanted to paint my room. I was worry about that how could i paint this whole room. Then i talked to firends and they all came together to my home and we all finished the paint in few hours. Iam very glad to have the best friends. They made my life more healtheir and happier.
We all have a desire to have a best friend. But a friend is that who will stand by you even during the toughest time. As in the passage, friends make life better.Having friends is really important for us because thay help us to reduce our stress, boredom and depression. friends can be great study partners because when i came to college i do not understand how to do college assignments and home work. So my class fellows helped me to do my home works and now i really enjoy to do group study because we all friends help to each other.I strongly agree with the author that friends makes our life and health better and esay. (you don’t talk about health however. I would just focus on how your friends help improve your study and how that had a positive effect on your life) As in the ariticle, friends reduce our stress and anxiety. Same like this oneced i wanted to paint my room. I was worry about that how could i paint this whole room. Then i talked to firends and they all came together to my home and we all finished the paint in few hours. Iam very glad to have the best friends. They made my life more healtheir and happier.(you don’t need to talk about many examples. Just focus and develop one)
I agree with author because friends can help me happy study. For example; many students like to study at the workshop rather than study alone at library, because they can share their difference experience and knowledge with their friends, which can make them happy during the study time. Moreover, it may stimulate our interesting to study hardly, because most people like to compete with each other especially friends. That’s why most successful people have a lot of friends in their life.
I agree with author because friends can help me happy study (you are using happy here as an adjective for study. Not as an adjective that describes your feeling when you are studying. You would need to say that your friends make you happy while studying. If you say “happy study,” it’s the same as saying sad clown, or happy child. It’s a description of the noun). For example; (semi-colons should be used to connect to complete sentences together) many students like to study at the workshop (what workshop?) rather than study alone at library, because they can share their difference (difference is a noun. If you want to use an adjective to describe experience, you would need to say “different”) experience and knowledge with their friends, which can make them happy during the study time. Moreover, it may stimulate our interesting (interesting is an adjective. You are trying to use the noun “interest”) to study hardly (hardly means very little. I think you wanted to say “hard”), because most people like to compete with each other especially friends. That’s why most successful people have a lot of friends in their life. (I don’t know if most successful people have lots of friends in their life but your points are interesting, particularly that you can collaborate with your friends and study better.)
I agree with strong social network of friendship is health for people because we can have lower stress levels and reduce stress by friend. Obviously, friendship is a important part of our life. Sometime friend can help us in emergency and sometime we can learn something from friend. As such friend can be a best listener. We can talk to friend as how' s life going on or stress of life. If we share our stress to friend, we can receive helpful suggestion or comfort from friend. So our health will get promote because the stress levels can be lower and reduce.
I agree with strong social network of friendship is health for people (what do you mean here?) because we can have lower stress levels and reduce stress (you are repeating yourself) by friend. Obviously, friendship is a important part of our life. Sometime friend can help us in emergency and sometime we can learn something from friend. As such friend can be a best listener. We can talk to friend as how' s life going on or stress of life. If we share our stress to friend, we can receive helpful suggestion or comfort from friend. So our health will (be better) because the stress levels can be lower and reduce. (same thing, lower and reduce)
People is always looking for the cure of illness, how to drink from the fountain of youth without knowing that is more simple that what it looks like. The fountain of happiness is nothing else then our special people. Friends play a strong and powerful role in our life as the article stated because people with more friends have lower stress levels, but I don’t refer as any particular friend, since you can’t consider everyone your friend. We have partners and classmates but a true friend is there for you in good and bad times. I think friends are the cure for a lot of pain in your life that is why is consider such as strong medicine, knowing that you have that strength of somebody when you are weak can help you climb the highest mountain without noticing, friends help you in so many ways to overcome bad times, I have felt in my life no desire to keep going after I lost my mom when I was 11 years old, and luckily I had few but powerful friends that were there for me to help me overcome my pain, wasn’t easy for them to restore my happiness or make me laugh like before, but they understood and where consistent with me, and now I have nothing else that my complete gratitude to them. I feel like without such friends I could never be the person I am today, full of spirit and desire of living. Friends without doubt can make easier a long and frustrating path in life and that’s why I agree that ‘’friends make your life better’’.
People (are) always looking for the cure of illness, how to drink from the fountain of youth without knowing that is more simple tha(n) what it looks like. The fountain of happiness is nothing else th(a)n our special people. Friends play a strong and powerful role in our life as the article stated because people with more friends have lower stress levels, but I don’t refer as any particular friend, since you can’t consider everyone your friend. We have partners and classmates but a true friend is there for you in good and bad times. I think friends are the cure for a lot of pain in your life that is why (it) is consider(ed) such as strong medicine. (K)nowing that you have that strength of somebody when you are weak can help you climb the highest mountain without noticing(;) friends help you in so many ways to overcome bad times(.) I have felt in my life no desire to keep going after I lost my mom when I was 11 years old, and luckily I had few but powerful friends that were there for me to help me overcome my pain(.) (It) wasn’t easy for them to restore my happiness or make me laugh like before, but they understood and (were) consistent with me, and now I have nothing else that my complete gratitude to them. I feel like without such friends I could never be the person I am today, full of spirit and desire of living. Friends without doubt can make easier a long and frustrating path in life and that’s why I agree that ‘’friends make your life better’’.
As you said to respond to this article with personal experience, I tried to write about this article sharing my personal experience.
ReplyDeleteIt is no wonder when w get any unexpected result in any aspect of life we think ourselves as totally useless in this world. And I think I realized that when I was in my 11th grade. That time I was so excited and more interested in other things about to have fun with friends than giving concentrate to my studies. As well I did very bad in my first exam. I was like to speechless and so frustrated. And also get scared to do better in my next exams. as an introvert person I did not share with anyone else that I am in big trouble with my study, also my mental situation as well. Even I tried to get back to be regular in my study but still it was not seemed manageable to me. And I could not stay away from my closest friend's eys. She asked me and started to dig my brain and read my mind. She tried to understand what was going on inside me. finally I had to shared with her. I told her I am just lost and so scared. and found no way to get rid of this depression. The feeling of that time was like my pains and depression are coming down like a fountain as I felt that at least there is someone who can realize me. Then she helped me out of that bad time by spending more time with me, encouraged me. And tried to make me realized myself. Now only thing I can feel is a good friendship is like an open diary whatever I want I can write forever. It always keeps giving me spaces to write more about my mind and thoughts which are so personal, only a friend can realize that.And that diary never says not to wrote. On other hand I also realized that there are always some friends for hanging out but some friends are just for you.
It is no wonder when we get any unexpected result in any aspect of life we think ourselves as totally useless in this world. And I think I realized that when I was in my 11th grade. That time I was so excited and more interested in other things (about to have fun with friends than giving concentrate—concentration is the noun, concentrate is a verb. I can’t give concentrate. I can give concentration-- to my studies). As well I did very bad in my first exam. I was like to (this is unnecessary, just remove and you’ll say what you want to. You are not like speechless. You are speechless. You can be like something, but you can’t be like an adjective) speechless and so frustrated. And also get scared to do better in my next exams. as an introvert person I did not share with anyone else that I am in big trouble with my study, and also my mental situation as well. Even I tried to get back to be regular in my study but still it was not seemed (you can’t put was and seemed together. Seemed is not an adjective here. It is a verb.) manageable to me. And I could not stay away from my closest friend's eys. She asked me and started to dig my brain and read my mind. She tried to understand what was going on inside me. finally I had to shared (shared is a verb, but you have it after “to.” You can only create an infinitive. So it should be to share) with her. I told her I am just lost and so scared. and found no way to get rid of this depression. The feeling of that time was like my pains and depression are coming down like a fountain as I felt that at least there is someone who can realize me (what do you mean realize?). Then she helped me out of that bad time by spending more time with me, encouraged me. And tried to make me realized myself (again “realize” doesn’t make sense. It is not be the right word). Now only thing I can feel is a good friendship is like an open diary whatever I want I can write forever. It always keeps giving me spaces to write more about my mind and thoughts which are so personal, only a friend can realize that.And that diary never says not to wrote (wrote is a verb, but if you are using it before “to,” it needs to be “write” because that’s the infinitive form). On other hand I also realized that there are always some friends for hanging out but some friends are just for you. (This is good but you need to connect it back to the reading. Use the language of the reading to make your point.)
DeleteI agree with the statement that friends make your life better. It is a powerful weapon to help your health. Friends can help you to change your emotions. When you get in trouble , you can get help from your friends and also you can share the happiness with your friends. For example , When I get some problems from my homework, at first I will ask my friends instead of thinking by myself.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the statement that friends make your life better. It is a powerful weapon to help your health. (how?) Friends can help you to change your emotions.(that’s a new idea. How does it relate to health?) When you get in trouble , you can get help from your friends and also you can share the happiness with your friends. (trouble that will have a negative impact on your emotions?) For example , When I get some problems from my homework, at first I will ask my friends instead of thinking by myself. (and what happens?) (there are a lot of unanswered questions. This is a good beginning but this reads incomplete)
DeleteWe all have a desire to have a best friend.But a friend is that who will stand by you even during the toughest time. As in the passage, friends make life better.Having friends is really important for us because thay help us to reduce our stress, boredom and depression. friends can be great study partners because when i came to college i do not understand how to do college assignments and home work. So my class fellows helped me to do my home works and now i really enjoy to do group study because we all friends help to each other.I strongly agree with the author that friends makes our life and health better and esay. As in the ariticle, friends reduce our stress and anxiety. Same like this oneced i wanted to paint my room. I was worry about that how could i paint this whole room. Then i talked to firends and they all came together to my home and we all finished the paint in few hours. Iam very glad to have the best friends. They made my life more healtheir and happier.
ReplyDeleteWe all have a desire to have a best friend. But a friend is that who will stand by you even during the toughest time. As in the passage, friends make life better.Having friends is really important for us because thay help us to reduce our stress, boredom and depression. friends can be great study partners because when i came to college i do not understand how to do college assignments and home work. So my class fellows helped me to do my home works and now i really enjoy to do group study because we all friends help to each other.I strongly agree with the author that friends makes our life and health better and esay. (you don’t talk about health however. I would just focus on how your friends help improve your study and how that had a positive effect on your life) As in the ariticle, friends reduce our stress and anxiety. Same like this oneced i wanted to paint my room. I was worry about that how could i paint this whole room. Then i talked to firends and they all came together to my home and we all finished the paint in few hours. Iam very glad to have the best friends. They made my life more healtheir and happier.(you don’t need to talk about many examples. Just focus and develop one)
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ReplyDeleteI agree with author because friends can help me happy study. For example; many students like to study at the workshop rather than study alone at library, because they can share their difference experience and knowledge with their friends, which can make them happy during the study time. Moreover, it may stimulate our interesting to study hardly, because most people like to compete with each other especially friends. That’s why most successful people have a lot of friends in their life.
ReplyDeleteI agree with author because friends can help me happy study (you are using happy here as an adjective for study. Not as an adjective that describes your feeling when you are studying. You would need to say that your friends make you happy while studying. If you say “happy study,” it’s the same as saying sad clown, or happy child. It’s a description of the noun). For example; (semi-colons should be used to connect to complete sentences together) many students like to study at the workshop (what workshop?) rather than study alone at library, because they can share their difference (difference is a noun. If you want to use an adjective to describe experience, you would need to say “different”) experience and knowledge with their friends, which can make them happy during the study time. Moreover, it may stimulate our interesting (interesting is an adjective. You are trying to use the noun “interest”) to study hardly (hardly means very little. I think you wanted to say “hard”), because most people like to compete with each other especially friends. That’s why most successful people have a lot of friends in their life. (I don’t know if most successful people have lots of friends in their life but your points are interesting, particularly that you can collaborate with your friends and study better.)
DeleteI agree with strong social network of friendship is health for people because we can have lower stress levels and reduce stress by friend. Obviously, friendship is a important part of our life. Sometime friend can help us in emergency and sometime we can learn something from friend. As such friend can be a best listener. We can talk to friend as how' s life going on or stress of life. If we share our stress to friend, we can receive helpful suggestion or comfort from friend. So our health will get promote because the stress levels can be lower and reduce.
ReplyDeleteI agree with strong social network of friendship is health for people (what do you mean here?) because we can have lower stress levels and reduce stress (you are repeating yourself) by friend. Obviously, friendship is a important part of our life. Sometime friend can help us in emergency and sometime we can learn something from friend. As such friend can be a best listener. We can talk to friend as how' s life going on or stress of life. If we share our stress to friend, we can receive helpful suggestion or comfort from friend. So our health will (be better) because the stress levels can be lower and reduce. (same thing, lower and reduce)
DeleteI need to see more writing from you
People is always looking for the cure of illness, how to drink from the fountain of youth without knowing that is more simple that what it looks like. The fountain of happiness is nothing else then our special people. Friends play a strong and powerful role in our life as the article stated because people with more friends have lower stress levels, but I don’t refer as any particular friend, since you can’t consider everyone your friend. We have partners and classmates but a true friend is there for you in good and bad times. I think friends are the cure for a lot of pain in your life that is why is consider such as strong medicine, knowing that you have that strength of somebody when you are weak can help you climb the highest mountain without noticing, friends help you in so many ways to overcome bad times, I have felt in my life no desire to keep going after I lost my mom when I was 11 years old, and luckily I had few but powerful friends that were there for me to help me overcome my pain, wasn’t easy for them to restore my happiness or make me laugh like before, but they understood and where consistent with me, and now I have nothing else that my complete gratitude to them. I feel like without such friends I could never be the person I am today, full of spirit and desire of living. Friends without doubt can make easier a long and frustrating path in life and that’s why I agree that ‘’friends make your life better’’.
ReplyDeletePeople (are) always looking for the cure of illness, how to drink from the fountain of youth without knowing that is more simple tha(n) what it looks like. The fountain of happiness is nothing else th(a)n our special people. Friends play a strong and powerful role in our life as the article stated because people with more friends have lower stress levels, but I don’t refer as any particular friend, since you can’t consider everyone your friend. We have partners and classmates but a true friend is there for you in good and bad times. I think friends are the cure for a lot of pain in your life that is why (it) is consider(ed) such as strong medicine. (K)nowing that you have that strength of somebody when you are weak can help you climb the highest mountain without noticing(;) friends help you in so many ways to overcome bad times(.) I have felt in my life no desire to keep going after I lost my mom when I was 11 years old, and luckily I had few but powerful friends that were there for me to help me overcome my pain(.) (It) wasn’t easy for them to restore my happiness or make me laugh like before, but they understood and (were) consistent with me, and now I have nothing else that my complete gratitude to them. I feel like without such friends I could never be the person I am today, full of spirit and desire of living. Friends without doubt can make easier a long and frustrating path in life and that’s why I agree that ‘’friends make your life better’’.
DeleteThis is a very powerful and effective paragraph.
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